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Leaves
The wind drifts the leaves
as the wind picks up
they twitter to the ground.
The leaves are now falling to the ground
The point is pointing at you like a bee going to sting you.
The Autumn trees have no leaves
The crispy crunchy leaves are gone
The trees are naked.
The temperature suddenly is bleak
Winter is coming
Autumn is finished.
Autumn is finished.
Katrina Mairs 10 years
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| WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing SUCCESS CRITERIA | SELF ASSESSMENT |
| Includes four nouns (from observation) | |
| Made the nouns do something | |
| Started each new description on a new line | |
| Extended each line so it makes more sense (may include a who, where, why, what, when). |
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Clear reading of your poem and awesome layout of your post, Katrina! I like how you added a reflection label for your self assessment.
ReplyDeleteMy favourite parts are crispy crunchy leaves (alliteration) and the naked trees (personification.
Cool Katrina, this is great, my favorite part is when you said that the trees were naked I think that that was very well thought. Was that your favorite part of your great poem?
ReplyDeleteHi Floss
DeleteThanks for the comment!
My favourite part was writing this sentence
The leaves are now falling to the ground
The point is pointing at you like a bee going to sting you.
This is really cool
ReplyDeleteI like how you died your Leaf
what an good ending two
Amazing Katrina.
ReplyDeleteI like the first paragraph.
What paragraph do you like?