This is the 100 word challenge. This week's (Week 6) prompt is (What is that?).
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The weird thing
“What is that?” I curiously asked Olivia. “I haven't the foggiest idea Katrina, What kind of animal would wash up on Mahia Beach?” Olivia replied . “It looks like an animal eye of some sort”. “We should maybe hand it in to a animal research, so then they could research it.” “Well that’s so obvious Olivia, of course the research people would research the animal.”
Now we were running to the animal research place. We handed the eye into the animal research place. We handed our personal details in. We found out it was an giant squid eye.
Hi Katrina,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have put loads of dialouges and you have put them in the right places which is really good for your high punctuation.
From khateeb
Hi Khateeb. Thanks for commenting on my blog. It makes me feel good you someone likes my work. This was a really fun piece of writing that I loved to write. So thank you Katrina :)
DeleteWhat great vocabulary and speech!
ReplyDeleteHi Jude. Thanks for the comment. I loved writing this piece of writing. Do you like writing stories?
DeleteGreat Story!
ReplyDeleteIts really interesting how you and your friend find an animal eye!
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Hi Elena. Thanks for the comment. I will check out your blog because you commented on mine. Thanks Katrina:)
DeleteThis is an good story, but doesnt really make sense (know were running to the animal research place) i thought it would be some thing like we investigated the weired thing and made our way to the research place. would be good.
ReplyDeleteHi. What is your name. I think that it is a great idea. I think I will change it. Thanks Katrina:)
Deletei realy love your story and how you use youe emagination
ReplyDeleteHi Katrina,
ReplyDeleteI am from Roseville College Sydney and in class we are doing the 100 word challenge. I liked your story however you did use the words research place so if you would replace them that would make your story more interesting.
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Hi lily. Thanks for the comment. Do you have any ideas of a research place name? Do you think I should change it to like DOC or something? I like it that you're doing the 100 word challenge I liked doing it.
Deletehi we loved that 100wc it was amazing because of the effort you put into it
ReplyDeleteHi Katrina,
ReplyDeleteThank you for submitting on this week's 100WC! I was impressed by your story this week, your dialogue was interesting. Do you think you can go back over it and have a look at your punctuation? There are some areas that you need to have a look at.
Well Done!
Tyla (Team 100WC)
Cool story!
ReplyDeleteIs that what you would actually do if you found a giant squid eye on the beach? Or did you just make that up?
Anyway, keep up the fantastic writing. Can't wait to read more 100 word writing stories!
i really like your story but i don't understand what animal would wash up to shore
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